No name, but please bash for direction

[takka360]

This is a very simple idea of a song and i don't know where i'm going with it
if anywhere at the mo.Maybe you can give me somewhere to go on it?
Maybe an idea of direction or tell me to scrap it?
At the moment i have the one verse and maybe a chorus i have been playing around with.not sure about drum beat but that's no big deal at precent so any thoughts please bring on.
Alan ps I have only been playing guitar for 6 months so be easey lol

[oldmusicguy]

I didn't hear a chours...??? Anyway, you have four catchy bars and those chords just repeat. To tell you the truth, that sounds like it IS the chours... I could hear you doing some standard verse, going to this chours a couple of times in the song, and then repeating this chours as the song fades out.

Also, I can hear another chord change somewhere in the second time of repeating these four bars... but I can't tell you what it is. If I get time to pull out my guitar I'll fool around with it and get back to you. But, I think there's a hook there and I certainly wouldn't let it go.

-my 2 cents... now bash my stuff... lol

[takka360]

Cheers for that,i think it has someting there just need to sleep on it.
Would love to bash your stuff but found nothing to bash?

[magno]

6 months? Sweet.
Here's some ideas, maybe it's all to cliche? anyways,
At the end of what you have now, in the last bar or 2 build the enegy up to a break(pause), then let it rock out with a guitar solo,maybe add an organ to hold down the melody. Then in to your chorus, double chorus. Add rock ending of choice.

[edub357]

By the vibe of the verse and music i get a "hopeless questions" or just a lonely feeling but fed up as well? Is this a love song or a "im leaving and don't follow me) song? all in all i like the mix and good job on the guitar for 6 months thats impressive. great job so far.

[crooked09]

Sounds good, production is fitting, I like the vibe of the playing, vocals are well done. I agree with adding a solo after that last verse part, and if you've got nothing else to say, hell, you could end it after that. Otherwise you could try beefing it up and adding choruses in between and at the end. But I think it's fine as is, and the lack of a chorus might actually add to the effect of the song.

[strug,p]

Nice song and guitar playing! I don't think it needs so much of a chorus, but if you find one that fits no harm in trying... Otherwise soloing with soul -guitar? sax?

Drums: Maybe you could try swapping the hi-hat with ride and see how that fits? Just an idea...

[willjrockstar]

I liked yr tune. How about a nice repeating outtro type deal.I also kinda wanna hear a key change in there as well,even if its only a couple of bars.I was toying with it a bit and was hearing a part that uses E,F,and G. Could help break it down a bit. I dunno just a thought.