Comments and Suggestions, Please.

[Katress]

Any suggestions to prove the mix would be appreciated! To be honest, I have an issue with some of the synths used, so if you have an opinion/suggestion in that area, please fire away!!

[fHumble fHingaz]

I liked the menacing bassline & the unusual loping rhythm - It builds nicely at the end... I think perhaps a stronger "voice" for the melodic signatures would help to move things along, but then it is more of an atmospheric type piece so perhaps that would be counter-productive...

[Katress]

thanks! good to know the "point" is getting across LOL

I agree, I think the melody needs to be stronger too...I just haven't found anything I like too much. I am thinking about adding some variety to the harmonic synths as well.

thanks again for the comments!! >^,,^<

[paulwalshmusic]

I really like the ambient, meloncholic feel. This music is crying out for a voice.
Could be spoken narrative, or wordless ahhs.
The cymbol sounds a bit too loud.
The rythmn is cool and bassline too.
You have created an ambient soundscape, which could be augmented by the sound of a human voice and directed by lyric.

[Katress]

thanks for your comments. the song was designed to be danced to; don't know what kind of lyrics i would be able to throw in.

[Dinaiz]

First I really like your song ! It's sound is really cool, even though I agree with paulwalsh music, and I'd say the cymbals are a bit too loud. Are you sure you wan't people to dance on this ? I would use this song to relax while taking a bath (which is a compliment : there are much more songs you can dance on than take a bath on :-) ) . Anyway if you want people to dance on this, I think you need a simpler rythm pattern, and maybe louder sounds, especially the kick.

My 2 cents

[Katress]

by being designed to be danced to, i meant by myself - it was written for an art piece of oriental dance.

aside from that, bathe away. thanks for the comments.

[garageband]

don't know what kind of lyrics i would be able to throw in.

Something simple and vague. Look through some of Enya's lyrics and other electronica. Treat it as another instrumental sound without a huge emphasis. It'll make it much more salable and, more importantly, easier for people to relate to and connect emotionally to the piece. This phenomenon describes why some in some music the vocal can be very low because people innately dial in to the sound of a human voice.

[Mike23]

I had two thoughts about your tune, aside from the fact that I liked the basic thang of it.
1. The drums - can't put my finger on it, but I think they need some help - maybe even morph them into analogue drums - halfway through?
2. Your voice - it could be a very good addition - not words - but your voice used like you use your body when dancing to the melody - but spare...
Who knows? You do

I liked it
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[Dinaiz]

Originally Posted by Katress

by being designed to be danced to, i meant by myself - it was written for an art piece of oriental dance.

Ok, I see, yeah I couldn't really imagine this song played in a huge club packed with people on pills, but I can definitely see it in a modern jazz show ! Anyway your song really has something. I'd tend to agree with mike's comment about the drums. Can't put my finger on it ether.

Keep working, it's good stuff!