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[tylerxfury]

new song i wrote
looking for opinions
please and thanks
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-verse 1-
Take it easy, girl cant you see,
I'm dwelling in my own apathy.
But these things look so bright
once standing on the other side.

Harsh realities, they're dawning in,
and please forgive me for my sin;
I'll make it up to you, someday, somehow,
if you would only give me the chance.

-chorus-
Because I'm singing and screaming and hollering,
Trying to convince you to come back to me.
But that's how karma goes, we all get what we deserve.
You left me standing here with just a few simple words.

-verse 2-
You're a ghost stuck in my past,
I used to tell you it wouldn't last;
I hope that we can pick it up,
take it from where we left off.

You say you're doing better,
you told me in a letter
that things were done and through,
and that 'us' will be no more.

-chorus-
But I'm singing and screaming and hollering,
Trying to convince you to come back to me.
But that's how karma goes, we all get what we deserve.
You left me standing here with just a few simple words.

-bridge-
But we're all just dreamers,
Lovers and schemers,
Trying to live it out
but we just keep waking up.
(waking up, waking up)
WAKE UP!

-outro chorus-
Because I'm singing and screaming and hollering,
Trying to convince you to come back to me.
I'm not one for karma, Is this what I deserve?
It seems to be a lesson I'll never learn.

[edub357]

well since noone posted to your original post i will! I actually like these lyrics its always better to know the rythmn of the song when reading the lyrics because you know where the meody lies within the words. your chorus is touching since i to have lost someone special and was "left standing with only words"i like that line alot.. what genre of music is this for? im sure its already recorded by now so is the track in here for bashing? remember if its from the heart there are no right or wrong lyrics!

[tylerxfury]

wow i appreciate your post,
im glad you can connect to the lyrics as well
its written for a hardcore rock type of style
i havent recorded it yet but it is a near future idea, once i manage some free time

[edub357]

your welcome! see this is a perfect example of how regardless of what type of music you listen to if you take the stereotypes that have been beaten into our heads we find out that its all the same, pain,love,loss,triumph,ego,etc! it might come across different but in the end we can all relate in a way. keep jammin bro!