One of my Better Days-Repost-hope this works

[bradstockmusic]

ALoha,
Apparently the file i posted played like a mangled cassette tape prob due to 320 kb bitrate, i'm uploading directly this time...
Mahalo!

[jjb]

Interesting composition and orchestration. Nice mix of styles, including what I assume is reggae. Ending was kind of abrupt. While some segments could probably benefit from redoing due to slight out of pitch situations, and the segment where the drums were by themselves sounded a bit odd (the snare), I enjoyed the song.

jjb

[bradstockmusic]

Thanks for the input, jjb. I heard from a friend snare is too loud i'll fix that. I will redo the vocal track. I am aware that there are pitch issues-the vocal take is from the first scratch track i did for the song but i kept it because i liked the feel/attitude...but you're right i can nail the pitch if i re-record it.
Mahalo for your input...
Brad.

[fHumble fHingaz]

I really enjoyed this tune - a memorable hook. My initial thoughts were that the snare was perhaps a bit loud, but generally the mix is good, & I like the drum sounds you've gotten. The thing that does need attention is the "t"s, "j"s, "d"s & similar consonant sounds on the vocals - usually the "s"s are the problem, but that doesn't seem to be the case here. It could be being exacerbated by the delay effect. Selective eq/compression (similar to de-essing) would do the trick on this - it possibly needs to be applied to the delay effect send as well.

[dberry001]

First of all - the music in this tune is flawless! BRAVO on this and it's really enjoyable to listen to.

Now - I'm not near as experienced in the studio as the other guys that are on this site. But, from a consumer - music lover's point of view - here are my thoughts...

In the first part of the song it just sounds like you are trying too hard. The octave you are tryiing to hit just seems out of place for the beginning. You sound very uncomfortable. Forget about the missed notes - that isn't the problem I heard. However, you straighten this out later in the song.

The groove in the music is kickin great!

Maybe try doing the first verse in a lower tone. Your normal voice - but of course going along with the melody. Then - - - pick up the octaves later in the latter verses and chorus. Kind of a 'buildup thing'.

It just sounds like you are forcing something in the beginning.

I love the tune - BIG TIME. That's why I'm typing this stuff.

So - again - know - I'm not a professional musician that knows the ins-and-outs of recording. Take this input as you like.

I would love to hear how you progress with this song. You've really got something here!!!

Best of luck!

[bradstockmusic]

Wow. Thank you for the helpful review. I very much appreciate it. Yes you are absolutely right. The voice-which is actually the scratch track from the first time i ever recorded the vocal idea on my trusty zoom h4 hand held-i kept because i liked the attitude of it through the rest of the song, but indeed the vocal needs to be replaced i took a few hours yesterday and yes sometimes i try to hard. I'll do it next time after a nice surf and hope to relax it in there.
Thanks again for the helpful review and i'll check out your music as well...
Brad.