BUTTERFLY -Hit me, hurt me, make me write bad checks

[Patient Dreams]

This song was wrote about a man and woman who's live's where change by a drunk driving incident. The acoustics are a little hollow but none the less.Thanks for the listen and critique. Cool, Peace

http://www.soundclick.com/util/getpl...d=5358936&q=hi

Butterfly
Written by: Lyneva Starbuck @04/23/02 Lyneva Starbuck

You were always the strong one
Can’t count the times I’ve leaned on you
I think it’s time I repay the favor
It’s the best that I can do

I’ve screwed up so many things
Now I’m gonna lose ten years of my life
But I won’t let you imprison yourself
Don’t wanna let go but I know it’s right

Butterfly fly away, oh fly away from me
One as beautiful as you wasn’t meant for captivity
Break out of your cocoon, set yourself free
Butterfly fly away, oh fly away from me

My own bad decisions cost me you
Through it all you remained true
The one I could count on above the rest
No matter how much time passes I won’t forget

My heart says hang on tight don’t let go
My mind keeps telling me no
My conscious won’t let my heart win this
All I want is your happiness

Butterfly fly away, oh fly away from me
One as beautiful as you wasn’t meant for captivity
Break out of your cocoon, set yourself free
Butterfly fly away, oh fly away from me

Give it a listen:
http://www.soundclick.com/util/getpl...d=5358936&q=hi

[thesilentdrummer]

I really Like the vibe of this song. The lyrics and stuff are awesome, and the performance is full of great energy. There are some mixing issues though. Do you have a better version of it (not obscured by soundclick or myspace) so that we can bash it without looking through sewer water?

[Patient Dreams]

Vocals are clipping, acoustic is hollow. Thats pretty much my best recording. Hell it might even sound better going through the vine. Thanks

[brandondrury]

I'm not big on this type of reverb. It's got that live at the country fair type of sound and kind of makes the lyrics a little less intelligible. I'm not big on the direct acoustic guitars sounds.

I can tell the song has a special vibe to it. I like the lead guitar sound at times. It reminds me of a Bryan Adams thing or something. Obviously, the playing is lot busier than Bryan Adams.

You clearly clipped the vocals at times. I'll let you decide if this is distracting or cool.

Brandon