 Re: Some lyrics
Hey, interesting lyrics. I was just messing around with it a wee bit with acoustic guitar and one particular line I had trouble working in was "While we involuntarily watch a war". IMHO I think if you moved some of the lines around and write a few more where needed you can get a good rhythm with the lyrics. In their present state I could hit a rhythm in places then totally loose it with the next line. This isn't picking, I have the same thing with my stuff on my first lyric draft of a tune. Are you writing with an instrument or just writing the lyrics as you would poetry? I find that as soon as I can bet a first verse down the rest come easier if I have worked out the music with guitar as I continue to write the remaining lyrics. I think you are on the right track. Would like to hear this one when you are done, it definitely has potential.
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