[khaliqovision]

I really like the song and think it has lots of potential.
There are a couple of things that you might want to look at
to improve it.

First, your drums are the energy and driving force for this
song and they are getting lost. What usually happens is,
they are fine when you start, but as you add more
instruments, they vanish. You need to hear the backbeat and
the cymbals clearly for punch and accent. Maybe add sparkle
to the cymbals.

Next, your power chords are a little too thick so they are
eating up the space that the drums and bass need. Try
cutting some low mids to get them out of the way but still
have power. Try compressing them also, if you haven't.

Also, your bass is completely lost, and if you think about
it, it is the only instrument that is playing a sort of
melody line so it needs to be heard as a secondary hook.

The vocals sound great and the acoustic just needs some
more room by cutting the frequencies of the other guitars.

Listen on different size speakers because certain things
vanish when I listen on my big monitors, headphones, laptop
speakers, nearfields, etc.

These are just a few tips that I hope will help you and
others.

Take Care,

Khaliq