[kyleknapp]

The style is not my usual cup of tea, but I have a few thoughts to offer.

As for the mix, I think overall it sounds pretty darn good. Especially the intro.

There are a couple of production points you might look at. The first is at about 22seconds, as the intro ends and the vocal comes in, where the bass, guitar, and some of the drums drop out for a few beats - something about this transition just irritates me. A combination of the timing of the first keyboard chord, the way the vocal is phrased, and the starkness of the decibel drop seems awkward. You might try omitting the first couple keyboard strokes, and/or re-singing the vocal with more interesting inflections.

The 2nd point is that the vocal overall, but especially on the choruses, is kind of monotonous and lacking in flavor. You have a nice-sounding voice, but I think you could do a lot more with it. You might try phrasing the chorus differently - delay the 1st syllable of "everybody" by 1/2 a beat, for example. You're doing your vocal accents in sync with the keys and either they're slightly out of sync at some points or they clash somehow with the drums - I'm thinking the chorus might sound less choppy if either your vocals or keyboards were phrased a little differently (does that make sense at all?)

Anyway, just my two cents. Good luck!