 Lyrics for review.
I've been working on this one for quite a while, and I'd like to get an opinion. The song is an acoustic rock song with a slight Journey-like feel to it. I'll post the recording when it's done. In the meanwhile...
Shadows fall
On the bedroom floor
He hears her say she sorry
As she walks out the door
She dries her eyes
With the curtain of his heart
There's no more room for sadness
When you're back at the start
The mirror gives a cold and hard reflection
You can lie to the ones you love, but not to yourself
I've come to terms with the fact that you're leaving
But I'd rather it was you than anyone else...
Morning light
Through the painted glass
He knows that she's gone
But it's much too fast
Her pillow's cold
And the sheets are empty
The dawn is unforgiving
But the night is free
Is there a chance that tomorrow, it won't be raining?
He stares out of the window towards the sun
She spread her wings and soared above the ocean
While he lays grounded like a wounded dove
How many hours have we wasted together?
And how many days have passed us by?
I only ever wanted to lift you up
To help you spread your wings and fly
I never thought it would be a goodbye
Wisp of smoke
Curling 'round his fingers
Sharp intake of breath
And the feeling lingers
He dries his tears
in the bottle's hollow
His spirit fails
'Cause there's no tomorrow
Her healing hands now are cold and barren
And she's spent too long lying to herself
His voice is raw from lonely nights of silence
But he'd rather it was her than anyone else
How many hours have we wasted together?
And how many days have passed us by?
I only ever wanted to lift you up
To help you spread your wings and fly
I never thought it would be a goodbye
You pushed me toward the edge, and now I find I'm falling
Funny how I didn't see until the end
Grasping for the ledge so I can pull myself back to safety
but my fingers slip the stone again
A sliver ring
Left in her old drawer
He finds the tiny band
As she knocks on the door
Her eyes are dark
And her hands are empty
"I've come to say goodbye,
If you'll let me"
He smiles and places the ring in her hands
And whispers, "Just keep on lying to yourself."
The rain starts to fall to hide her tears
'Cause she'd rather it was him than anyone else.
How many hours have we wasted together?
And how many days have passed us by?
I only ever wanted to lift you up
To help you spread your wings and fly
I never thought it would be a goodbye
Constructive criticism is always welcome.
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